2016 January — Comments/Reviews/Thoughts
Feb 14, 2016Posted by on
It’s the time of year when the garden beckons, not the least to repair the damage caused by the storm. Meanwhile: I’m sure that it isn’t true or at its worst, a very bad generalisation, to think that writers consistently find it easy to write in a particular style. However, there are a number of unique styles amongst these stories that are always engaging and wide ranging in their themes.
- THE CONQUEROR’S JOURNEY. Written by TurkishJenny. (1) An interesting travelog come historical account Jenny which I think fell short on both counts. Given the restriction on words (thank goodness otherwise I wouldn’t be doing this) I think that it should have been one or the other.
- THE IMP. Written by Giselle. I recognised the plot-line Giselle but thought its economic and exploitation theme grim. It seemed to me that story could have made the economic and exploitation allusions a lot more understandable in their intended context than what was actually achieved.
- THE LEGEND OF BELLA VISTA. Written by Colmore. Hello Colmore — I had never hear of Frank Goodwin CMG, DSO and wonder how many of his generation pass unnoticed, their achievements lost. The connection worked well, then I’m a Winnie the Pooh fan and I read the story as a dig at Kim Jong-il by FG.
- THE FIRE-CROW. Written by Lostinwords. A nice take on the legend Lost, I enjoyed the read but on coming to do this now wonder about the last sentence and the words prosaic and chough. Did we need this sentence unless the chough is a cornish connection?
- THE DREAMERS. Written by TurkishJenny. (2) I enjoyed this story the most out of your three entries, unlike The Conqueror’s Journey I thought that it it held together much better. While I enjoyed reading it I still felt that it was more than one story with a tenuous connection.
- THREE LEGENDS. Written by TurkishJenny.(3) I recognise all the names and see here only the outlines for what could be three complete stand alone stories.
- AUNTIE RHODA’S ROCK CAKES. Written by Fizzeerascal  This was a nostalgic theme for me Fizz (at least in terms of the period in which it was set) and a well composed story. The diary was cleverly done and the ending quite sad, despite which it was an enjoyable read and quite unexpected from the title.
- TINGLING RILL. Written by Capucin. A number of stories have confused my with their composition this month Capucin. The two or three elements to this story (if the birth of the legend Tingling Rill is one) are all interesting and relevant but their appearance in splitting up the story line of each didn’t work for me. I really enjoyed each part and recognised a composite storyline — just would have liked a simpler beginning, middle and end.
- STARTING OVER IN YOUR SIXTIES. Written by ExpatAngie  What can I say Angie — a romantic story with a happy ended — perhaps what I needed to read at the time. Your descriptive elements and dialogue appear easy and flow well. If you’re ever going to have a sad ending post the story with a health warning. I’m familiar with Memoirs Of A Geisha but rather slap handed with the tea pot.
- THE 2T. Written by Peter Barnett. Ran out of word space.
- LEGACY OF A LEGEND. Written By PavlovaQueen. What a really clever and composed story PQ, the ending as quite unexpected. It’s difficult to pick out a sentence from so many good ones. The last paragraph sums it all up so neatly.
- VIVA LAS VEGAS. Written by Jo Jenner. ‘Paul I wish you’d stop using that silly voice,’ she said as she tried to leave the room. That sentence struck me as really funny. I didn’t ‘get’ the story: The bullied schoolgirl theme didn’t seem to go anywhere in particular and the transition into Elvis Lord just ‘sort of happened’. An interesting storyline that had the making of a really good story that eventually meandered to a conclusion.
- FLAT EARTH SOCIETY. Written by Rosiedee (?) An interesting and amusing story Rosie. The parrot’s squawk ‘Buy to let!’ provided the key to the story’s intent, at least I think it did. I explicitly read a political commentary into this story but one which I thought never rose above the amusing characterisations .
- THE HAND THAT SHOOK THE HAND OF A LEGEND. Written by Atiller. A really well told story Atiller and a legend indeed. It was clever making a story out of this incident.
- MEETING PETER THE COOL. Written by Danthemann.  Another tour de force Dan — it’s amazing how you create these storylines. I assume that the confusion over the paper clip was a contrived and wonder if Peter the cool can be let in by Peter the gatekeeper, means there’s hope for us all.